SELF CRIT

1. Surreal Housewife of Memphis
2. A series of abstract vignettes of recollections of my past along with narration of poetry.
3. My inspiration has come from the numerous marks these life experiences have left on me and how it's effected my perspective on life as human at this point in my life. It also comes from my interest in discussing issues that people would usually take seriously, but in a lighter, less dramatic way. AT THE FRIST STAGE: for the first pitch:
I want to flash these shocking visual symbols along with some jarring language that will get people's attention. But instead of using these "on the money" shots where the narration directly correlates with visuals,

I'VE NOW decided to create more of a performance piece, i will shoot this "surreal housewife" character (representing myself) feeling trapped in the confinement of one's home, with the reminders of the past, doing simple domestic things to keep her busy. Some of these things that maybe slightly suggestive, while the twisted nostalgic poetry is narrated throughout. The story will be told in an abstract way and this woman will be recalling all these memories while doing her housework and avoiding to do housework. She will pace and go back and forth in a very natural, realistic way.
I will recite these stories of all the people this character has been in the past, through exaggerated and some even completely true... she will compare herself to: a loose cannon, live wire, a ruler, queen, princess, rebel, fuck up, dumb drunk, the greatest walking compliment, sweet cajun swamp trash etc.


4. Ideally i want the audience to be able to identify some with this sense of a woman's journey and how she has gotten where she is, continuing on her journey.

5. A young woman, feeling confined in her home, and feeling like she's getting caught up in her past with thoughts going through her mind. These thoughts will mainly be memories of the past, but common daily reminders will also go through her mind and add to her worrying and stress. But in the end will find comfort in just walking outside of this apartment that she has been incubating in. She will find comfort in leaving the apartment and getting outside. Once she gets outdoors in the end all the happy memories will follow her.

6. Woman struggles with her past, daily responsibilities and daily tasks that cause stress in her life within her apartment. Woman ends up finding freedom when she escapes the confines of her apartment by going outdoors, outside of her apartment.

7. Problems mentioned in the classes feedback, are all dealt with in the following re-cap of my Journal notes taken during the critique:
-Does any of the images have to relate?
- maybe a little girl, old family footage style
- instead of stills make the viewer sympathize with this somewhat disturbing storytelling?
- will the structure be based on poetry?
- maybe the images that are coinciding with the narration shouldn't be "right on the money"
-could it be where this person is now?
- where are we traveling? what time is it? now or before? the time doesnt have to be linear
- doing domestic things in a house
- perhaps adding a performance aspect will make it clearer